Question

Puteți sa îmi Spune-ți dacă este scrisă corect? Dacă nu sa o corectați va rog eu! Pote Mai puneri niște expresii ms mult!
One cold day Tim and his friends were climbing a mountain. Dark clouds fencing the huge crests of the alpi. They shape a beautiful view.The authorities anunced that trips in that aeria were impossible to finish,but Tim and his friends didn’t care about it.
The friends started the trip. There was a lot of snow and this fact made the trip more dangerous.
They were in the middle of the trip. The way to the top of the mountain gets harder and harder. Big snow Trojans were in their way. The brave man in the group,Tim was the advisor.
All of a sudden Tom disappeared. The people in that group started to cry out. So slowly a voice started to hear and cried for help. It was Tim. He was ina pit and he couldn’t move,because he broke his leg when he slipped.
His friends called the rescue to save their friend. Before the helicopter arrived they tried to bring Tim to the surface. It was impossible because the snow was too slippery
Before long the helicopter arrived and took Tim with a platform. The rescue took all the adventurers and took them in a safe place
They sighed with relief because they wore safe. Tim went to the hospital and put his leg in a cast. They understood after this trip that it.s important to care about what the authorities said about weather and trips because,if you don’t you can lose your life.

Answer 1

Ai folosit cam mult "Tim", în rest e ok

Answer 2

Da,este scrisa corect