Question

Rewrite the story. Use the prompts to give more detail and make the story more interesting.
One Sunday afternoon last winter (which month ? ) ......I decided to go with a friend of mine (who?) for a bike ride. (Where to?) It was very cold. (Give more details). He were cycling along a country lane when we saw some children playing on a frozen pond. (How old were they? What sort of things were they doing?)
Suddenly we heard a shout. To our horror one of the boys (Which one?) had fallen thourgh the ice! (Why? What had happened?)
We immediately rushed over to help but it was too dangerous to walk across the ice . (What was the boy doing?) My friend and I ran ro borrow a ladder. (Where from?) I put the ladder on the ice and crawled (How?) across it towards the boy. (What was the boy doing now?) I caught hold of hish and finally managed to pull him out of the icy water. Luckily the boy wasn't hurt , just very frightened.
His parents turned up about ten minutes later. When yhey saw him (Where? How did he look?) . they were shocked and very angry with him! I felt a bit storry for the boy. He had certainly learnt a lesson - the hard way!
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Answer 1

One sunday afternoon last winter, in august, I decided to go with a friend of mine, I think his name was Alex, for a bike ride. We were going to his parents. It was very cold. He said that his parents were waiting for us, so we had to hurry. We were cycling along  a country lane when we saw some children playing on a frozen pond. I think that they were about 10 years old. They were playing tag. Suddenly we heard a shout. To our horror one of the boys, the oldest one, had fallen through the ice! He slipped and fell, but he was very heavy so the ice broke. We immediately rushed over to help but it was too dangerous to walk across the ice .
The boy was shouting, and struglling not to drown.  My friend and I ran ro borrow a ladder from a house near by. I put the ladder on the ice and crawled very carefully across it towards the boy. Now the boy started to scream even louder. I caught hold of him, and finally managed to pull him out of the icy water. Luckily the boy wasn't hurt , just very frightened. His parents turned up about ten minutes later. When they saw him wet and terrified, next to my friend on the ground, they were shocked and very angry with him! I felt a bit sorry for the boy. He had certainly learnt a lesson - the hard way!