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One sunday afternoon last winter (....wich month...?) i decided to go with a friend of mine (..who?..) for a bike ride(where to?) it was very cold (give more details) we were eyeling along a country lane when we saw some children playing on a frozen pond (how old were they? what sort of things were they doing?)
Suddenly we heard a shout.To our horror one of the boys (wich one?) had fallen trough the ice! (Why?What had happened?)
We immediately rushed over to help but it was too dangerous to walk across the ice (what was the boy doing?) My friend and I ran to borrow a ladder (Where from?) I put the ladder on the ice and crawled (how?) across it towards the boy. (What was the boy doing now?) I caught hold of his hand and finally managed to pull him out of the icy water .Luckly the boy wasn't hurt ,just very frightened
His parents turned up about ten minutes later .When they saw him ( Where?How did he look?) they were shocked and very angry with him!
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One afternoon last Sunday, January 6, I decided to go with a friend of mine called David to a bicycle ride through the village. It was very cold but the beauty of the hills that were covered by a white layer, the trees that were impressed with bright flakes, and the houses with white caps made us feel that frost. I was in the eye of a country lane when I saw some kids playing in a frozen pond that was not yet played on it. But the children did not know and enjoyed only the beautiful winter that turned their village into a miracle, where children could only dream.
Suddenly I heard a cry. For our horror, one of the boys playing on that lake fell through the ice! Because the ice was thin, and when he slid with the sledge, the ice broke and the baby fell into the cold water.
We rushed to help him, but it was too dangerous to get over the ice that you could fall anyway. My boyfriend and I ran to borrow a ladder from a neighbor near the lake. We put the ladder on the ice and dragged slowly along the way to the boy. But the boy was not holding himself up. I caught his hand and eventually we managed to get him out of the frozen water. The boy was not hurt, only very frightened
His parents appeared about ten minutes later. When they saw it or enjoyed it so much that their child was alright, but they were shocked and very angry with him!